I think this is good, although I didn't really understand what happened to the girl or where the little girl was at the end. Why was she hiding? But the editing is really good in the early part I think.
The little girl acts well and the bit where she looks in the cupboard is good. I think you need to work on sound and music now as those are the bits that don't work. Where are your titles and credits going?
I think its good and you have made the characters clear, i don't know what is going to happen next which is good. Feels like ti ends a bit sudden though.
I like the story and i didn't expect it to happen which is good. I'm not sure all your cuts are right when the little girl runs down stairs and then into the kitchen. The right music will make a difference. Not sure where your credits will be though?
I think the music needs to change from not cfreepy to creepy when there is the knock on the door. Did the older girl know he was coming round, she answers quickly? And who is he?
Thye little girl is quite good at acting which helps, but i cant see where you will put your credits? Are you putting them altogether at the beginning?
It's good. The music is strange, don't know if it fits and the ending is quite funny.
ReplyDeleteLuke
your initial cutting is very good. the music doesn't fit the atmosphere. the acting is really good.
ReplyDeletemichael
I think this is good, although I didn't really understand what happened to the girl or where the little girl was at the end. Why was she hiding? But the editing is really good in the early part I think.
ReplyDeleteJess
I like the idea and the editing is good but you need to check all the cuts carefully as some may not match exactly.
ReplyDeleteSteph
The little girl acts well and the bit where she looks in the cupboard is good. I think you need to work on sound and music now as those are the bits that don't work. Where are your titles and credits going?
ReplyDeleteErin
It's going well but i think we need to see the little girl's face again after the big sister is kidnapped (at least i think that's what happens?)
ReplyDeleteSarah
Like this and the relationship between the sisters is good. Titles and credits? Have you thought where they are going?
ReplyDeleteHollie
Good so far, not sure about music. john
ReplyDeleteAgree about music but like it, the little girl is good and you feel bad for her.
ReplyDeleteRachel
I didn't expect the kidnap! It feels like a film opening until then. Not sure about music i don't think you really need any? Maybe just a sound?
ReplyDeleteMikey
Good so far, good editing and the light is good for a house.
ReplyDeleteJonas
I think its good and you have made the characters clear, i don't know what is going to happen next which is good. Feels like ti ends a bit sudden though.
ReplyDeleteRobert
Good and has good edits. Agree with what people have already said.
ReplyDeleteharry
I like the story and i didn't expect it to happen which is good. I'm not sure all your cuts are right when the little girl runs down stairs and then into the kitchen. The right music will make a difference. Not sure where your credits will be though?
ReplyDeleteCaitlin
You are doing well, keep going. Agree with cait there isnt an obvious place for the credits but you probably have a plan for that.
ReplyDeleteFarrell
I think the music needs to change from not cfreepy to creepy when there is the knock on the door. Did the older girl know he was coming round, she answers quickly? And who is he?
ReplyDeleteGemma
I agree it feels like there should be another scene but i like it.
ReplyDeleteTina
Thye little girl is quite good at acting which helps, but i cant see where you will put your credits? Are you putting them altogether at the beginning?
ReplyDeleteIsla
Good, agree door bit is funny.
ReplyDeleteLiam
I think its because she doesnt struggle that much but we get the idea.
ReplyDeleteJake
Its good, i think the title goes where the cupboard door shuts.
ReplyDeleteHarriet
I agree about the title and the door, thats a good idea.
ReplyDeleteShannon
She could have struggled more but tis good anyway.
ReplyDeleteBilly